Narration from a 12yo, please give feedback….

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  • my3boys
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    My oldest boy narrates almost daily from history/science/literature.  This is from the first chapter in Stonewall Jackson, the one recommended for Mod 6. He is not quick at writing and doen’t type yet, so to keep the narration flowing I type for him, so this is basically word for word.  I know he’ll need to be doing the actual “writing” part himself, but it slows him down and, frankly, I enjoy the time with him as he’s narratingLaughing.

    Stonewall Jackson

     Stonewall Jackson’s real name is Tom Jackson.  They live in a small town called Clarksburg .   Tom has an older brother and a new born sister.  Warren is his older brother and Laura Ann is his little sister.  His father died when he was about 3 years old and he had an older sister who died when he was 3, as well.  The first chapter is really about his family, well, his mom, brother, sister going into debt and having to move into a one room cottage.  His mother gets a job as a private school teacher and also sells her needlework.  That is able to pay all of the bills and still have some money left over.   So they live in the cottage for about two years.  Their mom makes a big announcement.  Warren asks if it is good news and their mom says that she hopes.  What the news is is that she was getting married again to Mr. Blake, which was a neighbor of theirs.  And so she says that Warren has to go to Idaho with his mom’s brother and that Tom and Laura Ann are going to go with her.  Warren and Tom don’t necessarily like that because they are close.  The three of them, Tom, Laura Ann, and his mom moved somewhere with Mr. Blake.   Well, Tom doesn’t really like it there and so they decided that Tom could go live with Mr. Blake’s brother.  So he agrees and Mr. Blake, the brother, comes and picks him up.  For about two months Tom lives with Mr. Blake’s brother, which would be his step uncle.  Tom decides to run away because he and Mr. Blake do not agree with each other.  So, he runs away to his grandfather’s house.  In all this time, in his running away journeys, he is walking like 15, 25 miles and he’s like 7 and nobody cares.  He makes a pit stop to his aunt’s house to get some food and stay the night and she just lets him go the next 18 miles.  So, he gets to his grandpa’s house and his grandpa tells him that he would give him something to eat, but that his mom is very sick (he knows this because the step father told him) and,  if he wants to see his mom alive, they have to leave the next morning.   And, so the next morning they leave to go see his mom for the last time. 

    Thanks for any thoughts. 

    Sue
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    I think it is wonderful.  He’s got a whole lot of details there, probably more than my 11yo or 12yo would include, and I like the way he is making connections with what he’s reading. (“….lives with Mr. Blake’s brother, which would be his step uncle.” and “he makes a pit stop at his aunt’s….”)

    Narrations are largely for comprehension and secondarily as a writing exercise, so his use of present tense is fine, too. I think it shows that he is relating to the story and characters. You could try having him write a narration of just a couple of paragraphs once you feel he is ready, just to see if he can put enough details into the written piece.  Then, you can add a bit more at a time for him to provide written narration, increasing things bit by bit.

    my3boys
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    Thanks Sue.  I appreciate your comments.  I had actually meant to stop short of his narration and have him finish but I just couldn’t do it, I was too interested.  I’ll try next time.

    He does do some writing himself (he just wrote a comparative of homeschooling vs. public school, he went for a while when he was younger), but it just seems to flow better when he gives an oral narration.  I enjoy that time with him so much since I don’t read with him as much as I used to (well, we do many family read alouds, but we used to read his history booklist as well).  I enjoy hearing what he thinks of the books he reads and I don’t quite get the same interaction with the written, plus we/I get all caught up in spelling errors, etc.  I enjoy just listening and not making it all about the errors.  When I read his written, I immediately look at the spelling errors and lose the enjoyment of the narration.  He knows I do that so he’s hesitant on letting me read his writings.  I try to not make it look so obvious, but I guess that’s a habit I need to breakLaughing.

    It’s so helpful to me to get feedback from other moms using the same method.  Thanks again.

    I like your idea to type while he’s narrating. I should do that a couple of times a week. My son struggles with writing, but he can tell back just fine. Many times his written narrations don’t reflect what he truly knows due to challenging spelling and grammar rules. It’s a long slow process, but I do see improvement over the months. Yay!

    I think your son did a wonderful job! 🙂

    my3boys
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    Thanks Simple Home. 

    I have found that with both of my ds/s that if I type as their narrating they’ll go on for much longer.  I can see them thinking/sorting it out in their minds, without having to work on spelling/grammar at the same time.  Once in awhile I’ll mention past/present tense, things like that, but otherwise it’s all theirs.  I think it makes for a better experience for us.  I can just say, “Wow, that was interesting.  Just like I read the chapter myself.”  And leave it at that.  My oldest feels too scrutinized by his spelling to believe that I actually enjoyed the writing, and he feels he disappoints me.  I try not to do that, but I guess it still comes across that way.

    Honestly, I just want him to be able to spell well and if he doesn’t know how to spell a word, ask or use the dictionary.  That’s really all I expect, but he doesn’t always know he has spelled a word wrong, that’s part of the problem, lol.

    He just wrote a page and a half about hs vs ps, I haven’t read it yet, I plan to today.  I’m going to see if he “told” me what thought of the two, and I typed, if it would come out a bit different than what he “wrote” by himself.  Even when he narrates from his general science, I get much more than when he writes.  I do try to tell him that what he shared is awesome, let’s just get that on paper, lol.  That’s why I’ve been typing for both older boys.  They even seem to know that I’m paying closer attention because I have to concentrate on what they’re saying.  I do print out the narrations and put them in their appropriate notebooks for them to see what they’ve accomplished. 

    Sometimes I’ll have my 9yo narrate (as I type), then draw a picture of any scene he wants from the story, then write a few sentences pertaining to the picture.  Or he can just shorten the narration he originally gave to fit on story paper.  I don’t always do that right after the first narration, especially if he’s not into it, or if he’s lost interest by that time.  He loves to draw so I’ll go with it if he wants to. 

    Thanks for the input and listening to me ramble on about narration, again!

    Thank you too! I am glad to have the same age boy with you and be able to share our thoughts!

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