My 10 y/o has done some light grammar in the past (EFTTC 1 and most of 2), so she has learned about punctuation, capitalization, quotations, etc.  Today she gave her first written narration.  I was pleased with the content of it.  However, she has a number of grammatical errors.  Should I just ignore them for now since this was about narration and not grammar?  Or should I select one or two things for her to correct?

Here is what she wrote:

John 2:1-12

A wedding was in Cana, and Jesus was invited. as well as His mother, Mary. And the wine ran out. Mary told the servants, “Do what ever He (the Lord) tells you.” and when He came and there we’re six stone 20-30 Gallons jug and he said to them “fill these jugs with water.” and so they did. And when they brought the water the master tasted it, it was wine! and he told the bride and the groom he said “you have served the best wind until now.”