Written Narration

Mind if I post my son’s written narration, so I know if this is what to expect at this age.  I’m not sure if this is what I should expect or not.  🙂  His oral narrations are GREAT, he goes into tons of detail.  His creative writing is also great – I think his stories tend to go above and beyond what I would expect at this age.  But written narrations, I feel like he could do better, but this tends to be be what all of his written narrations look like.  So pointers on if this is good for this age, how to encourage him to do better if that is what is needed etc.  🙂  He’s my oldest, so written narration is a bit new to us.  He is 10 years old (5th grade).

Here is his Narration (mistakes and all) from Wild Animals I Have Known.  I asked him to tell me the story of Lobo the Wolf.

    Lobo the Wolf is an amazing story about a hunter and a wolf (and I’m sure you know his name).  Anyway, Lobo was the King of the wolves and nobody could catch him.  The hunters tried everything, poison, traps, tricks, lairs, holes, everything!  Finaly, the best in the business – Ernest T. Seton himself, to try and catch Lobo.  (there was a $1,000 reward on his head.)  He couldn’t think of anything until he set a trap for Lobo and caught his mate instead just when he was about to shoot, He stopped, and thought a minute.  Then he realized “Hey, if I take his mate alive he will come to look for her, then I can kill Lobo!  So he locked her up and sure enough, Lobo came to the rescue.  Ernest lassoed Lobo and put his feet in traps, and the next day he died.